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#46 HaloD MC

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Posted 11 July 2006 - 04:09 AM

Untitled.

Darkness corrups you
It consumes you untill theres nothing left.
You look in the mirror and you see your self,
The darkside that you wish you hadent seen.
You see a box, you open it, its like a drug.
You cant seem to find the strength to pull away,
it just keeps consuming you.
Its sucking you in and theres no exscape.
I thought i had lost you, forever.
Then you walk by again.
The Deshavoo that reminds you of those terrible nights,
like you've seen them before.
Every word and every movment gets slower and slower,
untill time freezes.
It was my mistake in the beginning, i couldnt reach you, but i tryed.
The smell of green invades my brain, fogging my soul.
The smell of your smile keeps me going, those lips are calling for me.
Why cant i find them?


#47 BreakTheReflection

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Posted 11 July 2006 - 05:19 AM

QUOTE(HaloD MC @ Jul 10 2006, 09:09 PM) View Post

Untitled.

Darkness corrups you
It consumes you untill theres nothing left.
You look in the mirror and you see your self,
The darkside that you wish you hadent seen.
You see a box, you open it, its like a drug.
You cant seem to find the strength to pull away,
it just keeps consuming you.
Its sucking you in and theres no exscape.

I thought i had lost you, forever.
Then you walk by again.
The Deshavoo that reminds you of those terrible nights,
like you've seen them before.
Every word and every movment gets slower and slower,
untill time freezes.
It was my mistake in the beginning, i couldnt reach you, but i tryed.
The smell of green invades my brain, fogging my soul.
The smell of your smile keeps me going, those lips are calling for me.
Why cant i find them?



I really like this poem, Sean. I highlighted the parts that stood out to me the most. It's got a dark vibe throughout it. I really like the way you ended it too. Good work on this.

#48 HaloD MC

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Posted 15 July 2006 - 04:16 AM

QUOTE(BreakTheReflection @ Jul 10 2006, 11:19 PM) View Post

I really like this poem, Sean. I highlighted the parts that stood out to me the most. It's got a dark vibe throughout it. I really like the way you ended it too. Good work on this.


Wow thanks Katie!i tryed hard on this one, i just like getting every thing out ya know? i will be posting more soon. 4.gif

#49 *~*Raychel*~*

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Posted 16 August 2006 - 07:07 PM

Good job... smile.gif

#50 HaloD MC

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Posted 12 November 2006 - 05:50 PM

The Personality Room.

The Hell doors open up, the prisons break free for the night.
Stalking and waiting for there last breath of air untill there free.
They only feel the emptyness feeling that we once thought was an emotion, its so much more than that.
They eat, sleep and think that in every dieing breath they will rise up, and become much more than a peasant.
The re creation of personalities mess with our heads, for we have no other thoughts think.
We miss each other and never want to be apart again.
But we always seem to fall out of place and always get stuck.
The faint memories of once was good is now lost with the time, we just let the time slip away.
We left with out a single word, nothing was left to be heard.
The empty room was filled with past fights and past loves, But that was a long time ago.
She left with out a sound, she was gone with the wind.
THe room has that effect on people, sucking them in and spitting them out like chewed up gum.
They feel used and abused after that, but they arent its only in there head.
For thats all she had to say, before she was gone.


#51 fahmid101

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Posted 12 November 2006 - 06:03 PM

i havent been here in a while. i like your poems halo. it pants a picture in my head. good job 4.gif.

#52 HaloD MC

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Posted 13 November 2006 - 04:55 AM

Thanks fahmid...i dont really think my poems are that good..i like writing but i do think i suck lol

Mucho appreciation though smile.gif




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